How is this!?!? 10 Points!!! PLEASE!?

I honestly think this is the best short story Ive heard from a black man's point of view (written by a student of course).It's really good for your age. I'm a writing teacher, I know. I love it. Keep writing darling. Your going to get very good at it and go far. I would really love to hear the rest. This is your start. Trust me.