Would you be kind enough to give me your opinion on my poem?

Your poem is a very accurate description of depresssion. I recognize the feelimgs since I have felt that way too. I talk to a therapist or call a good friend when I'm depressed. It really helps to exercise. Join a group that does some kind of physical activity. If your feelings last, talk yourparents or a teacher or a counselor. I can't tell how old you are from the poem ! Take a walk or read a book, Find something to distract yourself.